I was very encouraged by the responses I received from the class. A number of mistakes they missed have been corrected, and I truly appreciate that. Also, for example, Katie made a comment about Atalus' bruising being yellow and how it takes about 3 weeks for that to happen. The question was: had he been traveling for 3 weeks? This is something I was completely unaware of when I wrote the piece. Luckily, he had been traveling for roughly that long (since he was on foot). But I certainly would have changed it if I calculated the travel distance differently.
Also, numerous other suggestions have been taken into account. A number of them were about fleshing out the characters and plot, but after I explained that this was chapter 9 in the story, there was a change of heart. It's very difficult to understand any story picking up at chapter 9, but I definitely looked back at my characters and added some details to them earlier in the text.
Overall, like I said, I was incredibly encouraged. The positive responses inspired me to work harder, and I've punched out a lot more since we discussed my piece.
Also, numerous other suggestions have been taken into account. A number of them were about fleshing out the characters and plot, but after I explained that this was chapter 9 in the story, there was a change of heart. It's very difficult to understand any story picking up at chapter 9, but I definitely looked back at my characters and added some details to them earlier in the text.
Overall, like I said, I was incredibly encouraged. The positive responses inspired me to work harder, and I've punched out a lot more since we discussed my piece.